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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. What is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Food is a mandatory need of every living organism on
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 planet. In
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world, where
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plenty of equipment
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 been invented for farming despite that, billions of
people
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 still suffering from starvation. Multiple measures can
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 to overcome
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 miserable situation. To commence with that l, it is the obligatory responsibility of the government to make sure the availability of edibles for individuals.
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, it is quite essential to make
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 flawless supply of food in deprived areas. According to a recent evaluation of research 55% of the whole population of India, has to live on footpaths, whilst sleeping
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 an empty stomach.
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,
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 are very destitute to help their children for the fulfilment of basic needs of proper nutrition.
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 inhabitants suffer from malnutrition.
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, nations have been developed, meanwhile depending on mechanical resources rather than manpower which is causing a lack of job opportunities. And
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 diverting
people
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 toward laziness. The government are
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 working as a machine which has no sympathy for hungry
people
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.
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 there
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 a luxury of abandoned land which is
affectedeffected
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affected effected
 by some serious drought in
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 two or three decades. The irrigation department can easily convert those lands into green land by putting
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 petty effort. That could be very productive for farming as well as cultivation of different crops
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feed those
people
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 who are living under the swear conditions of hunger.
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, china introduces to the world various way to cultivate multiple vegetables from the same plant regardless they are seasonal or not. In conclusion, it could be a burning issue
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 the coming days and can be the cause of human deaths or could display
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physical disabilities in the human body
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. Agencies should implant shelter homes, where homeless and wonder
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 can easily find food for themselves l.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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