You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

#college #cafeteria #lunchtime #improvements #magazine

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Artem Altukhov and I am a student in the Computer Science course. The bottom line is, that I am willing to share some feedback regarding our cafeteria and,

also

, wanted to give some points which can be improved. Basically, I really like the place. The atmosphere is gorgeous and it is pleasant to spend time there.

In addition

, I find herbal tea very tasty.

On the other hand

, there are some weak sides which can be relatively fixed.

First

, if it was possible, I would suggest extending the menu, since I have to eat there often and sometimes I find the items on the list quite repetitive. I would just add more snacks, drinks, cakes and

also

soups.

Second

, it seems the prices are growing up almost every month. I would recommend checking what is happening there

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

because there might be something wrong with the suppliers. I have heard some rumours that we are using the local ones, probably it is a perfect time to switch the focus to someone else. Please let me know if you need more details, I would be happy to provide more information. Yours sincerely, Artem Altukhov.

Submitted by logan.keller on Wed Oct 19 2022

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

199 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

8
band
You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Brendan,
How is it going after our vacation? I'm writing this letter to ask you a favour!
7.5
band
You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which conatined some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter - correct the information in the article -explain wy it is important for the magazine to give correct information -suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
I am Ram from the town of Kailasha, India. There was a recent article about my town printed in your reputed travel magazine "Traveloka" on 12th May 2024. Though most of the information mentioned was accurate, there were certain facts which got wrongly depicted. Hence, I would like you to correct that information about my town in your next month's edition.
5
band
Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion
It is argued that some people believe modern technology has impacted the way people buy nowadays; however, others are against this statement. This essay will elaborate on both opinions from two perspectives sides.
5.5
band
Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that education plays a crucial role in human lives. Some say that from all primary education to universities focus more theoretical-based on education instead of learning practical skill. I strongly agree with this statement because practical is required for getting employment and it affects innovative and creative ideas. This essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
7
band
In some developing countries, it is difficult to get good teachers to work in rural area which can have a negative impact on the education of children in those rural communities. Why do you think good teachers do not want to work in rural areas in development countries? What could be done to solve this problem?
Environmental problems have become one of the most pressing issues of our time. While some argue that these problems are too vast for individuals to tackle effectively, others believe that individual actions can significantly contribute to environmental preservation. In this essay, I will discuss both perspectives and explain why I am in favor of the latter view.

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?