You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Artem Altukhov and I am a student in the Computer Science course. The bottom line is, that I am willing to share some feedback regarding our cafeteria and,
also
, wanted to give some points which can be improved.
Basically, I really like the place. The atmosphere is gorgeous and it is pleasant to spend time there. In addition
, I find herbal tea very tasty. On the other hand
, there are some weak sides which can be relatively fixed.
First
, if it was possible, I would suggest extending the menu, since I have to eat there often and sometimes I find the items on the list quite repetitive. I would just add more snacks, drinks, cakes and also
soups. Second
, it seems the prices are growing up almost every month. I would recommend checking what is happening there,
because there might be something wrong with the suppliers. I have heard some rumours that we are using the local ones, probably it is a perfect time to switch the focus to someone else.
Please let me know if you need more details, I would be happy to provide more information.
Yours sincerely,
Artem Altukhov.Remove the comma
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