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Success is often measured by wealth and material belonging. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What are the qualities of successful persons?

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People regard wealthy people as the most successful. A
person
 who belongs to a considerable amount of money and material property is considered wealthy in
this
 material world.
However
, I don’t believe that only wealth is the measuring rod of
success
. There are many attributes to being a successful
person
. In
this
 essay, I will
also
 examine the good qualities to achieve the desired goals.
To begin
 with,
success
 can not be measured in terms of wealth and property only. There are many other factors to determine
success
. These are satisfaction, happiness, social prestige and achievement in life.
For example
, former US president Abraham Linken was very poor but the world considered him successful.
Similarly
, other achieved personalities are happy but not wealthy.
Therefore
, only wealth can not be a measuring rod of progress.
However
, it may be taken as a factor to regard
success
. A
person
 needs many good qualities to be successful. The main component is attitude. People’s attitudes should always be positive to achieve desired goals.
Secondly
, one must have consistency and patience. One should be able to cope with any circumstances and challenges to be successful. The
third
 quality is the capacity to take risks. A human who enjoys the status quo and does not want change due to the fear of risk factors involved in the change, may not be able to get its heights of accomplishment. To conclude, only having a good amount of money and property may not be enough to be a successful
person
. One should have many good qualities to be successful in life.
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