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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children.

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Education
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 is the foremost concept in the world, where all most all
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the
children
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 in every nation are participating in
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 development of the brain,
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their physical attributes etc.
Homework
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 is one part of the
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 theory, today half of
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believe
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 that
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 attending
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 should not be given work to do after
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 by their educators and while the opponents argue that
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 plays a major role in the life of
children
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. The following essay will contradict both of the aforementioned views and my point of view about the options. To commence with, in the past the older generation had a limited amount of time for their
school
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 activities which is from 9 am to 1.30 pm. But with the development of the technology and introduction of new curriculums to the
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 industry
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 have to study
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 hours in schools, due to these factors, educators providing extra
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 other than teaching in
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make
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children
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 depressed and
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 to various diseases
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 as mental disorders.
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, youngsters are addicted to
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 technological devices, and giving
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 to them will never be helpful since they never
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 their own brains, most of them get answers and different ideas from the internet.
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I believe,
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 work given after
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 by teachers is
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 prominent factor for the
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 to revisit the lessons learned in
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school
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 and
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 which
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 helps the
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 to develop their minds for
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future exams. As an example
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 face science and maths as the hardest subjects in the curriculum, educators providing
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 for these subjects train the mind of pupils, as well as their cognitive development, develops. Despite these facts,
children
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 have a limited time in
school
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 years where they have more time for
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gadgets gadgets
 in the future, making these kids busy in their
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 life will lead them to have a great future as well as develop their
education
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 skills, allow them to master subjects. To sum up, in my opinion providing
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children
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 with
homework
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 is an intelligent factor by teachers and
children
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 should know how to balance their
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lifestyle
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life style
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 without getting depressed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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