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Some people suggest that it is better for children to be brought up by the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents, rather than just the parents

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 hectic lifestyle looking after fresh minds is a difficult activity for every family which requires extra mental labour from
parents
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 and other members of the family.Some people say that it is vital to bring up
children
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 with relatives
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 as aunts, uncles and even
grandparents
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 compared to
parents
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 alone. I agree with
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 to a large extent for two main reasons and
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 essay will explain why. A significant
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 devotion is
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 to nurturing
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 during the initial years. For working
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 in
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 daily life, it is impossible to spend
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 with
children
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.So raising them with the help of
grandparents
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 and others gives a huge relief to
parents
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.
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 can do simple things
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 as picking up and dropping them from school.
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,breeding them with the family may give stress-free life.
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,
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 can learn unique skills from old people which play an important role in their personal characters.No one knows how to nurture buds that stood the test of
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,
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 love to listen to fairy tales and stories from their grandmothers. Learning social behaviour can
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 be a powerful weapon which can lead towards better mankind. To conclude,raising babies can require some parental skills.In my opinion, to cope with the rapid life race, every child should get a chance to live with old ones and even
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 spend the rest of their
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 in a peaceful environment.
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