The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The 2 tables compare temperatures and duration of
daytime
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the daytime
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from Friday 28th to Sunday 30th between
London
and
Sydney
in December of the year 2018.
Overall
,
Sydney
, Australia featured
a
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apply
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far
more
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warmer weather and enjoyed
longer
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a longer
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duration of daytime than
London
from Friday 28th to Sunday 30th
in
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of
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December 2018. There was little fluctuation observed for temperature in
London
while
the figure had remained gradual and slightly increase by the end of the week. Though, both observed
a stable hours
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stable hours
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of daylight over the period. On Friday 28th,
temperature
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the temperature
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in
Sydney
, Australia ranged between 26
celcius
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celsius
degree
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degrees
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in
maxium
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maximum
and 17
celcius
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celsius
degree
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degrees
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in
minium
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minimum
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compared to the one in
London
, UK
in
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with
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a maxium
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maxium
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maximum
of 9
celcius
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celsius
degree
and
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a minium
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minium
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minimum
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of 4
celcius
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celsius
degrees.
However
, it was
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a littly
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littly
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little
warmer in both
London
and
Sydney
with below 13
celcius
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celsius
degree
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degrees
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and more than 18
celcius
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celsius
degree
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degrees
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respective on Saturday 29th.
At the end
of the weekend, the temperature of
Sydney
reached its peak at 31
celcius
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celsius
degree
while
it is quite cooler at 10
Celcius
degree
in
London
. Both
Sydney
and
London
has
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have
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remained approximately 8 hours and slightly more than 14 hours
repsectively
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respectively
of daytime duration throughout the weekends.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, celcius, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The tables compare
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • ranged from
  • consistently high
  • slight increase
  • remained stable
  • significantly fewer
  • enjoyed
  • overall
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