Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?

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There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether all secondary and higher
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students
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should be taught planning finance. Some people agree that
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must lay the foundations of
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management, whereas others believe that
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skill should be taught
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or be learned by
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themselves. In my opinion, young people should gain skills revolving around
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institutions should talk about
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because a
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should be perceived as a place of universal knowledge.
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, people, who graduate from
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with an extremely high academical approach, usually do not have enough real-life skills,
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they struggle
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them on their own.
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how time is spent on gaining knowledge which could have been learned earlier,
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of focusing on other important things and achieving success.
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only
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can provide
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with the most accurate, relevant and reliable information.
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, statistically many households do not follow
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management tips, as they do not have enough knowledge and experience in
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field.
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, a child or a teen is likely not to implement good financial
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from family, which would be significant to the future life, and only his/her
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can help with that. Overall, I believe that
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there are many different sources from which youngsters can learn personal finance,
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is most likely to give the right hand to help them learn
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significant life skill, which by giving financial stability helps to have a calmer life.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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