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Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?

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There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether all secondary and higher
school
students
 should be taught planning finance. Some people agree that
schools
 must lay the foundations of
money
 management, whereas others believe that
this
 skill should be taught
in
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family
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the family
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 or be learned by
students
 themselves. In my opinion, young people should gain skills revolving around
money
 at
schools
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school
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.
To begin
 with,
education
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 institutions should talk about
money
 with
students
 because a
school
 should be perceived as a place of universal knowledge.
For instance
, people, who graduate from
schools
 with an extremely high academical approach, usually do not have enough real-life skills,
thus
 they struggle
learning
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 them on their own.
That is
 how time is spent on gaining knowledge which could have been learned earlier,
instead
 of focusing on other important things and achieving success.
Secondly
,
usually
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 only
schools
 can provide
students
 with the most accurate, relevant and reliable information.
For example
, statistically many households do not follow
money
 management tips, as they do not have enough knowledge and experience in
this
 field.
Therefore
, a child or a teen is likely not to implement good financial
practice
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practices
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 from family, which would be significant to the future life, and only his/her
school
 can help with that. Overall, I believe that
although
 there are many different sources from which youngsters can learn personal finance,
school
 is most likely to give the right hand to help them learn
this
 significant life skill, which by giving financial stability helps to have a calmer life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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