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Some people believe that, proffessional such as, doctors and engineers, should be requie red to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish

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 who are working as professionals doctors or engineers should be required to
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 they should be free to
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. If they want. I completely agree with
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 some workers impact positive our
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 not only benefit
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people
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 health. On the one hand, doctors and teachers are very vital to our modern society. Current days, most
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 have their own job. Humans should
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 the University. After that, they entered the study, they
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 where they want. Give an example, doctors
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 for less than ten hours while
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 other time is insufficient to take care of themselves. In
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, the earth is huge and a large number of
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 want as much as the teacher takes and they do not know what God has written for them. If we take what we want that might will be disaster
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, the majority of
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 study
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, others
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 in another state. Because, nowadays, times are changing a lot.
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 want to study in other modern nations. On top of that, in
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 pay a lot.
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 quarrels. I would like to restate my
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. All of them wish in foreign nations as well as they can do
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