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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently bought a second-hand car from a company that sells used cars, but the car developed some problems. You have phoned, left messages and sent emails, but you have not heard anything from the company that sold you the car. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter explain the problems you have had in contacting the company, and explain your dissatisfaction describe the problems with the car tell the manager what you want him to do You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding my recent purchase of a 2014 Nissan Rouge from your dealership, on 20th September 2024.
This
 car has some mechanical issues.
Therefore
, I have been trying to contact your company since
last
 week; but, no one is answering calls,
replying
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 to texts or emails.
This
 type of service is really dissatisfying and non-acceptable. The car was working fine until
last
 Sunday
,
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 when suddenly the ignition turned off and it broke down in the middle of the road.
Thereupon
, we towed it to a local mechanic shop and he figured out that the timing chain was out. He advised the vehicle is safe to drive for some time but the damage is severe, and repairs would cost approximately $4000. As it has been only a month, the vehicle is still under warranty. We would like to either get paid for the repairs
,
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 or return the car. Please let me know what would work best in
you
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 interest, and we will plan
accordingly
. Looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Mehakjot biding
Submitted by bidingmehakjot on

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Coherence and Cohesion
To further enhance coherence and cohesion, try using more linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, perhaps dedicating one to explaining the problem with contacting the company and another to the car's issues.
Task Achievement
The letter includes all the necessary details such as the purchase date, car model, and specific problems, leading to a strong task response.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate for addressing a business inquiry, being both formal and polite.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are correctly formatted for a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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