Many peole think that it is important to go to university while others prefer to start work without getting a universty education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, education is the most popular
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of knowledge that the majority perceives. Some people believe that
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it is
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university
,
others
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while others
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do not. I believe that
university
is usually more productive.
Firstly
, after graduating
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from school
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, most teenagers attempt to apply to higher education in order to
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not stay neutral.
In addition
, a
university
education
guarantee
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a successful career and
bright
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future.
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, if
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good at school and after that, you pass an exam
in
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university
. Your role in the future is bright.
Finally
,
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of youngsters prefer to learn
such
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of skills and stay
them
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with them
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. They do not need to hear several years
academic
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lexicon that
provide
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educational
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institution
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.
For example
, if you want to effort some restaurant or if you wish to build your business. Why waste time on the institute
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On the other hand
, it is
great
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opportunity to find work and feel comfortable
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them. If you have a job, it is a chance to earn money more and be
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financial
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independent. There is no need to study at
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educational institution to
industry
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as a waiter, cleaner or clerk. Because these types of jobs do not require any ability
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but instead
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of
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good personal skills.
Furthermore
, many people who have
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own business
they
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should not have a
university
degree. It shows
business
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is usually based
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social skills and real experience rather than
theoretical
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knowledge that we gain at
university
. In conclusion,
i
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want to say
if
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people
who
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have good qualifications it is one of the important things that no one can take away from
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.
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