Some people think studying from the past offers no benefit to today’s life, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

Some
individuals
think studying from the past offers is unnecessary to today's life while others believe that
history
is an essential source of information for us. In my opinion, The crowd should not spend much
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because
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.
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,
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past
time
. But people can learn a lesson from past mistakes. İf we look at the world we will see past always repeat. Research conducted by CNN revealed that most
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use
history
because
history
is a tremendous source.
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if we do not know how to make
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commerce we will learn from historical books. The crowd should concentrate on
history
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their goal. İf we look
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and learn
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mistakes we would not repeat the mistake
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, we will be successful in life.
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is wasting our
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because
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past and
future
are very different things. In the past student's curriculums were old but now their curriculum is very fresh and modern. Looking
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future
is a bright idea. Research conducted by Washington University revealed that
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is more essential than
past
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because we can not change
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but we can change
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with our decisions. People have
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of alternatives
instead
of using
history
. They can prepare
future
with new sources and they might
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a scholarship. In secondary
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most
of
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students
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use modern sources for understanding the
future
. İndividuals can organize
time
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of reviewing
history
. İf
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instead
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stuck in the past. In conclusion, Some
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believe
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past is a huge
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for improving
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but some
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because it reflects
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instead
of
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.
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