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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefit to today’s life, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

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Some
individuals
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 think studying from the past offers is unnecessary to today's life while others believe that
history
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 is an essential source of information for us. In my opinion, The crowd should not spend much
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historyI
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 because
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 is a just
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.
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,
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 reflects
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past
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. But people can learn a lesson from past mistakes. İf we look at the world we will see past always repeat. Research conducted by CNN revealed that most
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private
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school
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 because
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 is a tremendous source.
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 if we do not know how to make
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commerce we will learn from historical books. The crowd should concentrate on
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 to
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 their goal. İf we look
books
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at books
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 and learn
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 mistakes we would not repeat the mistake
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, we will be successful in life.
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,
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 is wasting our
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past and
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 are very different things. In the past student's curriculums were old but now their curriculum is very fresh and modern. Looking
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future
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 is a bright idea. Research conducted by Washington University revealed that
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future
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 is more essential than
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 because we can not change
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 but we can change
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future
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 with our decisions. People have
a lots
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 of alternatives
instead
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 of using
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. They can prepare
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 with new sources and they might
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 a scholarship. In secondary
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 most
of
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students
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the students
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 use modern sources for understanding the
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. İndividuals can organize
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 of reviewing
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. İf
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 want to overcome obstacles they have to focus on
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instead
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stuck in the past. In conclusion, Some
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 believe
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past is a huge
sources
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 for improving
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 but some
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 believe it
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does not work
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 because it reflects
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instead
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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