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Schools should not force children to learn a foreing language. Do you agree with this statement?

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While it is true that foreign languages have been taught in schools throughout the years, some people would argue that they should be optional. I am in disagreement with
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 I will explain why. To start with, it is generally accepted that learning a foreign
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 is owing to the different changes that happen inside
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 the number of connections between neurons goes up which makes
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´s intelligence increase. One clear example of
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 could be seen in the average scores obtained by polyglot
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 in comparison with those who do not speak a foreign
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. Another argument to put forward is that forcing
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 to study a foreign
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 will improve their future careers.
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 is due to the fact that usually big companies require well-prepared and plurilingual employees. People who are able to speak two or more foreign languages have far more possibilities to get a well-paid job than those who only speak their mother tongue.
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, within big companies
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 as Apple or Microsoft, there are only multilingual employees.
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, others would argue that forcing
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 to do any activity that they
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 refuse could cause on their brains several damages To conclude, I do support that
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 should be forced to learn a foreign
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 as through it their brain will benefit. Not only does the brain get positive results but
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´s careers will step up. As far as I am concerned, if as a society we foster
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 type of education we will have future talented adults.
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