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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while other say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school.Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #universities #offer #places #students #marks #ages #school
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 world, higher
education
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 is one of the most important aspects of life to become successful, and it is recommended that everyone should obtain a degree from a university.
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 many argue that only youngsters with higher
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grades
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 should be allowed to study in
universities
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, I strongly believe that there should not be any
grades
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 or
age
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-bound rules to get admission to
universities
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. First of all,
people
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 who are in favour of younger
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 argue that
students
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 of young
age
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 possess several qualities to complete their university
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 successfully with higher merits,
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 fast learning capacity and fewer family issues. It is believed that young
people
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 are very fast learners and, their brains can easily catch up with the new skills taught in
universities
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.
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, most of the younger pupils have fewer family issues than the older
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 and,
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 distractions in their studies. Ultimately, that leads to higher success rates in their
education
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.
On the other hand
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,it is very hard to decide
people
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's capacities solely based on their
age
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 and
school
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grades
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. To explain, many
students
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 with lower
school
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 performance have more practical skills to succeed in their profession than
students
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 with higher
grades
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.
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, there are chances that older
people
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 could not study at a younger
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due to
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 some family responsibilities.
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,
people
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 with lower marks and higher
age
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 should get the opportunity to study in
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.
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, even though it is true that younger
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 are the most suitable candidates for university
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due to
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 their higher learning capacities and fewer distractions, I wholeheartedly believe that
universities
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 should not discriminate between
students
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 and, should take into consideration various aspects other than
age
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 and
school
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grades
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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