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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why?

#students #work #university #study
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It is a common practice in western and European countries that
students
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 take a
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year
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 before
university
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 studies. Some
students
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 do travel and leisure activities during
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 time whereas
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others prefer to do jobs. I think it is better to do jobs in
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gap
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year
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 in order to experience a
work
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 atmosphere that will help
students
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 in selecting their
career
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 path .
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 studies.
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, working prior to
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 studies helps
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 to earn money.
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 money can be utilised for tuition fees and living expenses during
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, and
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 they don't need to depend on their parents which gives
students
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 self-confidence and satisfaction.
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, Report says that in the
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 2017, 75% of Leeds
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students
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 earned their tuition fees from the
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 done during the
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year
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.
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, full-time
work
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 helps
students
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 to select their
career
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 pathways.
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, during the
gap
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year
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, some
students
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 select to
work
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 full-time in a field where they wish to build their
career
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 and that helps them to understand the pros and cons of the field. Doing so,
students
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 will get a broad picture of the job profile and tasks involved which help them to understand and decide if
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 job is suitable for them or not.
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 to
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,
students
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 can experience the corporate
work
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 atmosphere and
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 will be useful for them to learn how to behave in the office and treat other colleagues. To conclude, gaining
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 experience prior to
university
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 is an added advantage for
students
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 that will help them to see the
career
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 path in a broader way.
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 will help
students
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 to select
further
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 courses.
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