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Computer are been used more and more. some people say this is a positive trend while others argue this will lead to a negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
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 claim that the
use
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 of
computers
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 is beneficial, but there is
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 some folk contrast with
this
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. From my perspective,
computers
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 and social technologies are advantageous, but they can
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 cause damage as well.
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 views of the argument and
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 provide my own though about them. Nowadays, social technologies are greatly more advanced than before; Due to
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, innovations
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 as mobile phones and
computers
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 are more affordable and more convenient to
use
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. Because of
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, many individuals consider them
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a part of their life. Using computer not only help
people
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 search for
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 and entertainment,
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 as videos and artwork
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 can help them work more effectively and have less stress. They
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 help
people
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 to contact each other easier and
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comfortable.
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,
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 the
use
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 of
computers
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 brings a lot of advantages, they
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 lead to many dangerous things.
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,
computers
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 are sure a good
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 provider;
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, some of the
information
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 they provided is harmful or can lead to some inappropriate activities;
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, sensitive and sexual content. Some
people
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use
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computers
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 to post and share about their life without carefulness, which could lead to problems
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 their private
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. Some
people
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 have already addicted to online content; Take online games
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. Individuals who
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computers
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 more than they should are going to face many health problems and a lack of face-to-face social activities. To be concluded, In my point of view, the
use
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 of a computer is
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 a good trend but ones has to make sure one doesn't overuse it. Consideration of
both
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 perspectives shows that the effect of
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 is up to the usage of each person.
Computers
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 can be
both
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 beneficial and harmful.
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