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universities should accept equal number of male and female students, do what extent do you agree?

#universities #students
Nowadays, there is a debate between parents, policymakers and students regarding
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equal admission opportunities for
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 and females.
However
, many of the female population in past were out of school but in recent, days the number of females graduating
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 out coming the male. Regarding
this
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both
 the positive and negative sides of
this
 opinion. On the one hand, having
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equal numbers of
both
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genders in classrooms can help to do the classroom group activities more effectively,
for example
, when making groups some females don't feel comfortable co-working with the opposite
gender
 In order to, avoid any
such
 issue it is a good approach to have an equal number of
both
 men and women. Whereas, there are certain more
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 professions,
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 intake many seats will remain vacant and a deserving candidate may not get the chance.
Moreover
, an Oxford university research published in Canada, states across the globe number of the male population is decreasing as compared to the other
gender
. So it can’t be a practical approach.
In addition
 to
this
, the role of merit can’t be overlooked to have brilliant brains in the job field and for the prosperity of any society. In conclusion, it is good to eliminate
gender
 inequality in universities and colleges but in real- time; it has certain limitations so keeping in view, these concerns it would be a bottleneck for the institutes to reinforce
such
 rules.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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