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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the Internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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It is true that now, because of the advanced technology,
such
 as the Internet, smartphones and computers, people do not travel much for
work
, and they start
work
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 from
home
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss what are the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 development. On one hand, one advantage could be the
time
 saved.
Firstly
, all the
time
 we usually spend travelling and getting ready
,
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 is not required
while
 working from
home
. Another advantage would be the convenience of working from bed and
also
 the advantage of multi-tasking,
for example
, it will be possible to
work
 and cook at the same
time
.
On the other hand
, as I said above, working from
home
 looks easier and comfortable, but is the same
time
 could bring a lot of disadvantages
in
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 our lives. One of them could be social lack, no more meeting your colleagues,
also
 just laying in bed cold brings health issues
such
 as obesity, or spine problems because of the comfortable position, you are not travelling anymore, you do not get fresh air in the morning you used to
had
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while
 travelling and
also
 the sunlight is very important, and again, you will not have that if you are not going out of your
home
 and travel for
work
.
To conclude
, working from
home
 has advantages and disadvantages and the best option I believe is to find the balance between those, working from
home
 some days, and others travelling for
work
, avoiding the social lack and all the health issues.
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