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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

#schools #tablets #laptop #computers #students #school #books #materials #exams #assignments #trend
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 to the previous century. A huge figure of schools
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 replaced
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published tools
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tablets and desktops for students.
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considerable merits to children and adults ,
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 it can be
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 to the pros, technology is
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pupils for several reasons.
Firstly
, it can be really helpful due to children do not necessarily need to carry
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heavy bags.
In addition
,boards and laptops store a large
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animations and images would make classes more attractive and fun rather than reading in textbooks.
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On the contrary
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Firstly
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the earth's atmosphere.
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environment
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 global warming and air pollution.
Secondly
,it causes eye strain.To illustrate
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 for long hours bring about eye problems .
Besides
,online content might be inappropriate for a
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 to play video games or
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youtube. So,clearly consuming tech-equipments
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younger
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young
 people. To sum up,
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the technical
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Therefore
,I would strongly
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recommend
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recommend
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all educational centres provide
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 in order to tackle many environmental problems.
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