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Some people think computer and internet are important in children's study, but others think schools and teachers are important. Discuss both sides.

#people #computer #internet #children #study #schools #teachers
Some
people
 consider
computer
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computers
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 and
internet
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the internet
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 are significant in
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off springs
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offsprings
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study
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studies
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, but others think
schools
 and
teachers
 are crucial. I will discuss both sides in my essay. Nowadays, most
people
 think that
computer
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computers
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 are substantial in
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apply
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off springs
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offsprings
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study
, because at
the
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apply
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present
children
's
able
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ability
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 to learn about everything because of
computer
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computers
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 and
internet
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the internet
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,
in
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on
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 the
internet
children's
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children
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 can find whatever they need and need.
For instance
, on
instagram
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Instagram
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 step by step blogging is developing and
thus
everyday
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every day
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 appear new bloggers and
they
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apply
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have
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to
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teach
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taught
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 about
study
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the study
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.
For example
, I watch different bloggers in English to improve my English. If I hadn't started watching English bloggers, movies and programs
in
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on
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 the
internet
, I wouldn't have progressed, but some
off springs
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offsprings
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 started watching in the
internet
 harmful things or games and
thus
 some
people
 think
schools
 and
teachers
 are crucial. I guess
teachers
 can play an important role in
children
's learning, but
however
 at the
present
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 there are good and bad
teachers
, especially there are very bad
teachers
 in
schools
 and
therefore
 is no
study
 in
schools
, and
thus
children
's started going extra courses. In my view, if
people
 so want to
study
 they are able to learn in any circumstances, probably
in
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on
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 the
internet
 and
computer
 or with the help of tutorials or
teachers
. It depends on the person he can use the
internet
 for useful or vice versa harmful things,
also
 he can
study
 with the help
teachers
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of teachers
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 or
schools
. In my
opinion
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 both sides
good
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are good
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, if you can use
it
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them
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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