Around the worldit is likely that more adualts will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative development.

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world
is likely that more adults will
work
online from
home
, and more children will
study
from
home
. The technology become inexpensive and more suitable.
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the pros
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and cons of
this
development.
Firstly
, there are many pros of computer technology, especially in
study
and
work
. individuals want to
work
at
home
instead
of
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to the workplace. It is
more
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a more
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comfortable place than the workplace. Pupils are concentrated in
the
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school If they
study
at
home
that will increase concentration. Research conducted by CNN revealed that most private
school
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schools
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and
public
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the public
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school
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schools
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turned
into
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online
education
. Because
curriculum
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the curriculum
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is very flexible and children easily focus on
study
. In the online class
students
focuslesson
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focus lesson
focus less on
instead
of
distract
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other
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objects. Professor says
same
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thing for adults because when they were working from
home
they can not talk with
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colleagues
collegues
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colleagues
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therefore
they will easily concentrate. Research conducted by Koc University revealed that Online
education
more
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is more
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essential than
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face
to
face
education
. Koc University compared both
of
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way
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ways
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. Online
education
is eligible
about
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price accessibility and opportunities.
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in online
education
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we can attend a lesson in every location but we can not do the same thing in
face
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the face
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the
face
education
.
Secondly
, İn my opinion,
face to
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face
education
is more properly den online
education
. I know it is a personal preference
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depends on people but I will explain my ideas.
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online working is less influential than
face to
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face
working. Research conducted
that
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by CNBC revealed that Most
students
struggle in internship cause of online
education
and lack of
work
experience.
face
to
face
always better in
education
and
work
life because in
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the face
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face to
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face
education
students
can imagine in their
mind
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but they can not do the same thing in online
education
. It is
same
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the same
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in working online working is
a
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issue for individuals because it leads to misunderstanding
therefore
it would be difficult. Negative
effects
are dominating positive
effects
therefore
I
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online
education
and
work
life
is
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harmful. Some
syllabus
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syllabi
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do not properly for online
education
for example
we can not teach biology with online
education
. İf pupils do not understand the lesson they can not prepare an assignment. İt causes a lot of issues.
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example
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unsuccessful
students
can not take a scholarship. In conclusion, There are many pros and cons
about
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online
education
and
work
life but
i
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think the negative
effects
are more than
positive
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the positive
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effects
.
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