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Youngsters nowadays are involved in many crimes. What are the causes of this problem? In your opinion, how can we reduce youth crime rates?

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committed
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 of wrongdoing
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 adolescents.
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 family because
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 of many problems must
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 amount of upbringing. Surely extremely relevant development is struggling with
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 at school. Thereby, children should understand what is
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trustworthy
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department
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 need to draw more attention to
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Hence
 teenagers could be more calmed
moreover
 able to have free time for self-development. Nowadays youth
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aggressive
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 style of personality.
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psychology
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 of zoomers. Action games could wreak a moral
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people
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 generation and
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 generation. Overall If
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, each citizen
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 to unleash
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 of new gender. Every
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 deserve happiness
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