Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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to favour uncontrolled nutrition has come embattled over the past decade, following scientists’ booming concern

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health.

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has centred on whether it

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with banning markets from distributing these products. I am utterly convinced that

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prohibition

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action is highly likely to raise

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contend that the result would relieve

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mental issues. Presumably, most of the detrimental food is processed with unconventional ingredients triggering

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early death while

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is considered

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the permanent priority of any sustainable development,

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to say, having perished unhealthy products, people in compliance with official law would choose between healthy ones. Either obesity or diabetes, currently, would be

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if energy drinks,

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had been hampered advertising.

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the right to have long-lasting life.

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reasons vividly elaborate how adjusting surveillance on selling

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harmful

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goods aligned with

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children

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's mental symptoms.

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, the more they consume untested materials, the more they impose severe anxiety,

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hyperactive disorder ,and relentless stress during their growth period.

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a bewildering array of food companies take

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's health for granted, the consequences of selling these goods

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expected to have deteriorated public health by decade, by the same token, authorities should consider not allowing them to do that by regarding

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as the

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back bone

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of countries.

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, lucrative turnover in these companies might experience economic

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due in part to deflecting in their supply and demand chain;

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, banning

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above, I want to

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my position that selling unhealthy food and drink should be forbidden. Not only could

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action clear the path for

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and fruitful life, but

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would hinder

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and unstabilized mentally.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

330 words

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Regulations
accountability
retailers
public health
consumer choice
diet
banning
health education
awareness campaigns
economic impact
job losses
small businesses
complexity
beneficial
harmful
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Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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