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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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 the course of time, humans have experienced major setbacks in choosing a rented home
instead
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 of owning
one
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. Beginning with the instability of the lease agreements, tremendous consequences on mental health due to
financial
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the financial
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 burden
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 the payments, and
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 every generation starting from scratch to secure their own place.
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Therefore
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, I strongly support the countries that encourage owning a home
instead
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 of renting
one
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.
House
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 is an entity that can be transferred at will, from
one
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 generation to the
preceeding
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preceding
proceeding
one
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.
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, If a family has managed to own a
house
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, through
their
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sweat and tears,
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this
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 property can be handed over to the children of
this
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 family.
This
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 applies not only to the land but all the furniture
constitutes
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that constitutes
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 the
house
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 at that respective time. The
offsprings
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 can benefit from
anestors
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ancestors
 and will not have to go through
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thick and thin as they did to afford a
house
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 of their own.
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, being able to possess
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's own
house
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 provides
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the stability and presence of shelter throughout a normal regular life.
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 the contrary, a rented
house
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 can be taken away from a person if s/he fails to renew the lease agreement for any
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miscellaneous
miscellanious
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miscellaneous
 reasons. In
such
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 a case,
a
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major adversity lingers on
one
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 head i.e. finding a secure place to live. The benefits that follow after owning a
house
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, are not only limited to stability but
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 have
impact
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an impact
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 on
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the mental
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 health of the resident. If a
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person
peron
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person
 has their own apartment
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 they need not worry about having enough capital aside to pay the rental fees. In a nutshell, all the above statements bolster the fact that countries
preferring
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 owning an apartment is a significant positive element that proves to
beneficial
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be beneficial
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 for modern humankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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