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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

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It is believed
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some
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that doing unpaid
community
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work
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 ought to be considered as a punishment for prisoners in certain cases rather than being sent to jail. In my opinion, I believe that governments can cut their costs
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 employing offenders in some sectors.
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 reduce the negative impacts
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 from being sentenced
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to
prison
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. A major reason to have
community
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work
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 for specific offenders is that they can be employed in some state sectors to
work
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 as a form of
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 sentence. Indeed, criminals serve their sentence by doing a job in their
community
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 without any payment while they are not imprisoned.
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, they can
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 as cleaning staff to clean the streets or collect the garbage. By doing
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, not only the government can benefit due to the reduction in budget costs but
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 financial resources allocated to building prisons are saved. Another point to consider is that by taking criminals to jail they mix with other prisoners,
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,
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 can provide an opportunity for minor offenders to educate
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 serious ones.
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, those who have become involved in petty crimes can learn major offences when they fall in with the hardened criminals while being in
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.
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, a serious
criminal
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 will be added to
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society after being released from
prison
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.
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, these people are more likely to
reoffend
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re-offend
 crimes and
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, the crime figures will not decline. In conclusion, I think that
community
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 service could benefit
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society in many ways. The governments need
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 workforce and the money which is spent on building prisons is slashed as well.
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,
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 solution can minimize the effects negatively brought about by
imprisoning
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 since the people involved in minor offences do not need to be in
prison
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