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population explosion is a concern for a few nations. some counteries formulated a one child policy, and others are contemlating the same. Is it the right for a country to interference in restricing polpulation ?

Nowadays, a few nations are suffering from the crowd boom and
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 why they imposed a one-child code, and the remaining nations are drafting the approach, so they will implement it in the upcoming future.On my personal behalf, I think it is good for higher authorities to interfere in
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 rule, in the upcoming paragraphs I will explain my viewpoints and prominent examples.
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 with, due to overpopulation natural resources are depleting day by day, so a booming public makes a diverse effect on us, due to scarcity, products rate become high and in
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 ,way there are out of reach from common society.
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, the public will be suffered for their basic needs,
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 as bread and butter, and motivate them to do crimes or join unethical ways to earn money for themselves or for their livelihoods. On the flip side, governments have to choose a proactive approach, so they chop
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 upcoming disaster on their public.
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, one-child management is really helpful,
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, when a family have one single child
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, that child would be raised by proper guidance, in which he/she has schooling facilities and parents arrange funds for their future study or business. In some ways, due to the government's guidelines, folk have to face serious troubles, to illustrate their traditional values and so on. To conclude,
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 the population have faced some restrictions on their basic rights yet due to one-child action is act as a prolonged solution for the upcoming future,

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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