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In the past, people ate local food in season. Nowadays, people buy a variety of food from all over the world and any season. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, individuals can taste
food
 from every country for the whole year, but in the past,
people
 have no opportunity to eat
food
 manufactured by other places. As far as I am concerned, I think
this
 trend can bring about more benefits for
people
 compared with the drawbacks it might bring.
People
 can purchase
food
 from other places anytime, which takes massive benefits for them.
Firstly
, their standard of living can be improved. More
food
 transported from other regions provides them with more sources of nutrients and
therefore
 develops a healthier diet.
This
 is helpful for residents with a limited range of local
food
 in a particular season.
Secondly
,
people
, especially the old generation and disabled
people
 have
chance
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 to taste other
country's
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countries'
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food
, because their travel actually is tough
things
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thing
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, and they are easier to meet some challenges than normal
people
 in their travel time.
Therefore
, more options for choosing
food
 is a positive thing. What is more, there are some issues when different country's
foods
 become more available. The main one is that traditional
food
 is disappearing.
For instance
, many consumers prefer to choose multinational brands
instead
 of conventional brands when they purchase an item in the supermarket.
As a result
, local manufacturers cannot gain the profit to support their companies. Another drawback is that the price of imported
foods
 is much higher, which means that
people
 should pay extra money for these
foods
. All in all,
although
this
 trend of imported
foods
 can bring some disadvantages, I believe that takes more benefits for
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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