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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the increasing population, government seek to build new houses.
However
, because of the myriad infrastructures and buildings in the
cities
, some people think that the
countryside
 is the only locally available for new houses. But others argued that these spaces should be preserved. In my opinion, I agree with the latter for two main reasons.
First
, the
countryside
 is the only stress relief for citizens from the congestion of the big
cities
. People try to be off the beaten track by visiting the mountains and the meadows.
However
, large green spaces will be removed and replaced by awful buildings which will destroy the scenic view and the picturesque landscapes that the
countryside
 possesses.
Furthermore
,
this
 will have some negative consequences on the tourism sector, because these days travellers are preferring mountains expeditions rather than historical ones.
Second
, the pollution rate in the
countryside
 is less than in the big
cities
. Pollution rates in
cities
 surge in recent years because of gas emissions and the waste of energy by electrical equipment.
Therefore
, having additional houses in the
countryside
 might duplicate the same problem and contribute to climate change.
For instance
, most countries
such
 as the United Kingdom and Spain have experienced an increase in the weather temperature that leads to fires in the forests. In conclusion, constructing new homes in the
countryside
 should have advanced planning to preserve the environment and protect the world from the negative consequences of climate change.
Moreover
,
an
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advanced planning to keep large spaces in
cities
 to build new homes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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