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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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concerned
concered
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concerned
 about
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environmental
enviroment
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environmental
 problems these days and think that they should try to solve the issues. Some
people
 think the government should increase the cost of
fules
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fuels
 for
automotives
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automobiles
 and other vehicles in order not to
worse
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 the air quality of the earth.
However
, other
people
 suggest that there should be
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other ways of keeping our planet clean and beautiful. The government can expect
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lower emit of carbon dioxides by introducing
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higher prices on oils because by doing so, some
people
 cannot afford to drive a car. Those
people
 who cannot afford the gasoline price increase will use the public
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transportation
transpotation
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transportation
instead
 of their own cars,
then
 the total amount of fuel usage will be lowered
therefore
 it will lead to better air quality.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think there
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should
shoud
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should
 be
more
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other ways to solve
the
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environmental problems.
For instance
, bringing up
the
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fuel costs will create
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unfairness between the rich and the poor. It is so clear that only the poor
people
 sacrifice their lives by not driving their own cars but the rich
people
 have no
impacts
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 on it.
Furthermore
, there are so many other environmental problems that
human
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humans
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 should actively work on,
such
 as ocean pollution. To protect our ocean, some
people
 are already working on
to reduce
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 the usage of plastic materials. In fact, we use the paper material of straws at Starbucks, which is actually preventing a lot of sea turtles from dying because of swallowing the plastic materials. In conclusion, additional charges on fuel would be
effective
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 way to stop
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air pollution,
however
, I believe there are many other ways to solve the environmental issues that
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human
humen
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human
 being should be involved
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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