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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the acdemic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #acdemic #world
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many that
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 should be widely shared
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particularly
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particularly
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others
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 believe that
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precious
 that
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illistrate
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illustrate
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 can benefit an entire nation,
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publishing
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 the wrong hand, can be used incorrectly to serve personal needs or even worse to destroy nations.
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kept hidden. on the other
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the public
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scientific
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can bring about many benefits.
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 can make use of research to
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develop
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itself
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it self
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,personnel can benefit from
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published
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 to advance in their career or to invent things which in
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 leads to
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the development
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 of
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society
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 based on shared
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inventor
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something
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useful
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useful
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merit of benefit. In conclusion,it has been
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quite
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a debate on
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whether
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whether
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scientific
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scientific
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This
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 useful to share
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