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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is an incontestable fact that environmental problems and
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frequently generates a great deal of heated debate.The supporters of solved on a global scale think that it serves its purpose in an appropriate way,while
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 suggest better to solve with national way is far superior.
This
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 controversial topic from a different perspective with justified illustrations in the upcoming paragraphs. To elaborate on the
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 viewpoint,the promoters of global ways of protecting the
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 is the best effective approach for many
people
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 agreement cogently due to multifarious reasons.
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 and most importantly,they believe that lots of communities find common and convenient solutions in order to protect places which are their living places.
This
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 States, France and Italy
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 to implement a rule
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 banning buying plastic staffs in order to protect the
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 because many surveys demonstrate that plastic is very harmful to the world due to having many dangerous chemicals.
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common rules can be protected more easily because of the same obligations values and impacts. On the other side , those who are in favour of
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 solutions are more beneficial for some individuals because of some reasons, namely the country's statements,financial consequences and climate changes.
Hence
,many ways exist in typical countries.To give a clear example,India has different methods of protecting the
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 than other countries because of the crowded both humanity and animal population.
In addition
,many
people
 and animals can generate air pollution and noise pollution.
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 advantageous for many
people
 because of having different qualities and features. Bearing in mind these sets of arguments, it can be seen that,both vantage points have their own explanation and support due to various reasons elucidated above making it a hot topic of discussion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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