In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in thier own country and not travel aborad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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people
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because they can have the time of their life with the closest family. Plenty of
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go to foreign
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every year for the sake of discovering other cultures, tasting exotic food or
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picturesque views. At the same time, many
people
for some reasons prefer to stay in their
country
. I truly believe,
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aforementioned
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occurence
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occurrence
may become more frequent over the years.
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first
, of all, inflation is growing day by day, in an effect the prices of accommodations, transport or food as well. For an instance,
people
who usually
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themselves to go to
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country
for holiday
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will have to spend much more money
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effect they will find an alternative in their native
country
.
Secondly
,
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political
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politicial
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political
situation is changing all over the world. Nowadays, with every
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we hear
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depressing
news about wars, especially in East Europe,
although
it may have
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impact on
travels
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between countries. Undeniably,
people
can feel
more safe
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,
furthermore
comfortable in their own
country
.
On the other hand
,
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of clients will
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airlines and travel offices to provide
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price
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for
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customers.
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small prices may have
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influence on companies which may go
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bankrupt
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opinion
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if
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prices
pricess
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prices
will increase every year
people
will struggle to
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they will have to find
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alternative
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luxurious
luxorious
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luxurious
holiday
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in
other
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country
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