In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Parents
have influence
on their Add an article
an influence
children
decision Change noun form
children's
specially
when Replace the word
especially
their
young. Replace the word
they're
they are
However
, I think that this
level of influence has decreased over the years and now young people
are more independent when making decisions. I will explain why I feel this
way in the next
paragraphs.
The first
point I would like to make is that now young people
are exposed to worldwide information
on the Internet. Because of this
increased access to information
, parents
are no longer the only information
resource that youth have. For example
, in the past without the
exposure, Correct article usage
apply
parents
used to be the main influence on their children’s decisions. Now, when young people
have a doubt, they could just search on the Internet about the topic to learn about and see opinions
of different Correct article usage
the opinions
people
around the world.
The second
thought I would like to point out is that globalization and easy ways of transportation has
helped Correct subject-verb agreement
have
to
young Change preposition
apply
people
to change their mindset about life. Let me illustrate this
with an example, when my parents
were young it was not easy to travel to different countries because ways of transport were not as develop
and fast as nowadays. Wrong verb form
developed
Therefore
, they were not expose
to different cultures and backgrounds. Change the verb form
were not exposed
On the other hand
, my generation can travel further
distances and different countries by planes, trains
.
To summarize, I agree that nowadays young Correct word choice
and trains
people
are better able to make decisions about their own lives than in the past. As I mentioned before the
exposure Correct article usage
apply
of
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to
Internet
and new transportation ways has helped them to acquire and be exposed to different Correct article usage
the Internet
information
that they take into consideration when they want to take a decision.+-Submitted by keylas999 on
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