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it is important for people to take risks,both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
As humans’ lives are always under the impact of different factors and everyone does
its
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 best struggles to gain an ideal level of
life
, some risky decisions should be taken to change or stunningly improve the quality of living.
This decisions
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This decision
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 may be in personal
live
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life
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 or in a
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person's
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parson's
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person's
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 career. In my opinion, it
is vary
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 from one to the other person and the consequences should always be considered. To commence with, some personal matters are
in
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a kind of
luck
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 event in our
life
 and the risk of their happening is unavoidable, like
the
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marriage which is often contemplated as a risky issue, you cannot certainly say how your
life
 would be, after
this
 event.
Although
 the decision is yours to try your
luck
 or not through
this
 type of
choices
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.
On the other hand
, investment in professional
life
, like
the
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financial subjects
are
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is
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 another obvious example of taking risks. I know someone who placed all his money on bets of soccer matches and earned a large amount of money, but it is a fact that
such
kind
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kinds
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 of risks may result in a big loss of money rather than a promotion.
Therefore
 it would be the most
wisely
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 decision to deliberate the consequences of
luck based
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luck-based
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 works. To sum up, from all the items
have
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that have
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 been told formerly, I can conclude that
,
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apply
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taking risks either in an individual or professional
live
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life
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 totally depends on the condition of the person, and participating
the
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in the
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luck
 factor in
life
 would not have the same result for all. So on, for one its advantages may outweigh the disadvantages while the same decision may have an adverse effect
for
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 another person.
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