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Success is often measured by wealth and material possessions. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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It is frequently common to associate money and the abundance of valuable possessions with being successful. In the following paragraphs,
this
 essay will cover that there are different ways to measure
success
 and that having a vision is crucial to
achieve
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success
. Even though most people have a tendency to associate the possession of material things and financial well-being
to
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 happiness, achieving accomplishment in
life
 is usually tight to people’s values and it is clearly subjective to each individual. The field and the environment where the individuals develop their
life
 and the people they interact with will have a say in regards to considering oneself successful.
For instance
, a scientist will be considered successful because of inventions and patents, which might not necessarily translate to financial well-being. Having a vision of oneself and of what we would like to achieve in
life
, sets the path to accomplishment and prosperity. Setting up objectives, targets and due dates motivates people to work hard and move forward to pursuing them.
Furthermore
, the achievement of
such
 goals gives individuals a sense of purpose in
life
 feeding
moreover
 your self-esteem.
For example
, according to a survey carried out by the University of Sydney, 60% of the population who consider themselves successful, had it clear at an early age what was their goal in
life
 and put forth a plan pursuing to achieve them through a lot of hard work and dedication. In conclusion,
although
 it is commonly assumed, wealth and material possessions are not the only avenues to define
success
.
Furthermore
, the sense of fulfilment is subjective to each individual experiences and values and as
such
 the way to way to measure it.
Moreover
, having a vision and setting up goals
accordingly
, leads to pursuing the achievement of
success
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affluence
  • Materialism
  • Fulfillment
  • Well-being
  • Philanthropy
  • Societal norms
  • Personal growth
  • Economic power
  • Subjective
  • Humanitarian
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