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Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #world #lifestyle
Nowdays
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Nowadays
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,
people
 are all
become
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becoming
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 interested in
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
, But there has many different
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opinions
opiniont
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opinions
 about
this
. Some
people
 think
it’s
 very difficult for
people
 to have a healthy
lifestyle
 but others don’t agree about
this
. In my opinion,
it’s depends
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it depends
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 on
people
’s
self-control
. On the one hand. In today’s daily life, there are many young
people
 laying on the sofa, eating the
junkfood
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junk food
 and watching TV or playing
their
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apply
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games. They may
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stayed
stay
staied
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stay
 up late and wake up at
next
 day’s afternoon.
It’s
 very bad right
.
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?
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 But for
this
 kind of
people
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,people
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it’s
 very difficult for them to
change
 their
lifestyle
. Because they
are become
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become
have become
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more and more lazy
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lazier and lazier
lazier
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 when they keep
this
 kind of
lifestyle
 for a long
time
. But
on the other hand
,
for
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if
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 the
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people
prople
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people
really
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who really
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 want to
change
 their
lifestyle
, it may become easy. You just need to
change
 junk food into vegetables and fruits. Go to bed at 11:00 o’clock
wake
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and wake
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 up at 8:00 o’clock. Eat every meels at the basic
time
. Don’t play your phone all the
time
, take a walk or read a book to getting rest. So, question is come up. why must the
people
 who have strong
self-control
 or the
people
 really want to
change
. Because even though the steps is very easy but
it’s
 has large different between the healthy
lifestyle
 and the
lifestyle
 you used to have. Some
people
 may give up because they can’t keep it for a long
time
. They may think vegetable and fruits are not as good as taste of hamburger; They may think reading books is not as interested as watching TV.
However
, the
people
 who has strong
self-control
 may just do it step by step
then
 they become success (they have a good living habits). So, all in all, I think
it’s
 all depend on yourself. All
people
 will make an effort when they want to
change
 their living habits. But for the
people
 who always give up
it’s
 sure be difficult for them. But for the
people
 with strong
self-control
 it will be more more easy.
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