Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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citizens with
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a tired
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face
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and weak
body
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walking on the streets, and
these kind
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of
person
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people
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did become the focus since some of them got
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a disease
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disease
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or even died because of their irregular breaking time. As the result, more and more
people
starting to join in the discussion about
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whether
wheather
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whether
people
can easily maintain a healthy lifestyle or not. It is reasonable for
people
who claimed that it is hard for them to be healthy to keep their opinion that they do not have
this
kind of living habit because of the heavy working tasks and the
highly
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pressure from
the
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society. By giving them an example to support
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statement, as more and more new
people
come into
the
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society, the elder workers need to work harder than before to maintain their social status while they
also
need to finish more tasks for
competitate
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competitive
a higher position or get a
get a
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higher salary, and
that is
why they always eating unhealthy food and living with an irregular schedule --- They need to save time. They can only order delivery and work until
the
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midnight.
On the other hand
, there
are
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also
some
method
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methods
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to keep healthy in all these cases, and there are some
people
who did it. To show a person I know
as
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the instance, he is working in a small shop, but his life is healthier than most of us. He just
do
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20-minute relaxing exercises after working,
and
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drink
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a cup of milk just before he
go
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to bed, and
wake
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up with no pressure in the morning because he
know
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it is another start for a beautiful day. He never
smoke
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, and only
drink
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a little bit
wine
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. Even the doctor said that he is completely healthy. In a nutshell, you can live healthy if you can have a regular habit for that. It is not
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necessary for a higher social status, as long as you are happy.
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