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Living in a fast-paced environment keeps
people
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busier, it leads them to a lesser time for themselves to take a break and enjoy some hobbies.
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essay will discuss the reasons and effects of every individual and their impact on our society.
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with,
people
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nowadays want to earn as much as possible to help their
families
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. To be a great provider, the head of the family should work for long hours to sustain their lifestyle. Resulting in fewer leisure activities with their kids to bond or travel somewhere.
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, it is part of every Filipino culture to extend their helping hands to the needy among their family members. To give everything, the provider needs to exert more time in working rather than enjoying life for a while. Meanwhile, it is common for young professionals to work hard to save money and buy their wants
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as new gadgets, and expensive bags or clothes to show off with their peers.
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, the working class were obsessed with their dreams and reach the point that they already neglect to enjoy life even for a day.
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,
people
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had lesser hobbies are prone to depression and burnout at work. It has
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detrimental effects on the health and mental status of every individual. It has a great impact on our society in which there are more cases of
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dysfunctional families
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families
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due to lesser bonding and communication among their
families
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. In conclusion,
people
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nowadays are busy meeting the needs of their
families
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and living extravagantly which leads to a fewer time for their hobbies.
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has bad effects on the health and mental status of every individual.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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