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rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? – Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that these days, the
poverty
 dilemma increase significantly in the
last
 decade. The question is, can the rich
countries
 support the poor
countries
 by giving them other
types
 to help, or financial aid can tackle the problems? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss
doth
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both
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 points and draw my own conclusion. In terms of the positive side, some
people
 believe that
give
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giving
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the
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apply
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poor
countries
money
 will help them to fight
poverty
. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that poor
countries
 can
built
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build
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the
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apply
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crucial facility like
hospital
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hospitals
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, schools and houses,
this
 method will solve the
poverty
 dilemma. To illustrate, South Africa, collected
the
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apply
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financial aid for
fixed
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the fixed
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 economy side and used
to
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it to
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developed
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develop
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 their country
and
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focusing on the education side will help
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the
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they
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the
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 country to
grew
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grow
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, and she will have an
education
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educated
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 generation fighting the
poverty
 in future.
However
,
other
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others
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 strongly
believe
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belief
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 that
give
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giving
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 other
types
for
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to
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 poor
countries
 will solve
the
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apply
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poverty
.
Firstly
, the developed
countries
sending
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send
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 food, medication, clean water and clothes to
helped
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help
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the
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apply
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poor families.
In other words
,
this
 way will support the
people
.
Secondly
, the rich
countries
 send doctors to
people
 to save them
of
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from
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 diseases
this
 way will keep the young
people
 strongly,
health
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healthy
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they
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so they
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 can work and
helped
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help
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their
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they
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the
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family
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families
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.
Also
, the
last
 studies show, approximately 70%
from
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of
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 the poor
people
 found
benefit
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to benefit
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 from other
types
 more than
money
 because the
money
 always
go
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goes
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 to the government and poor
people
 can't take
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anything
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any thing
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anything
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 from that. In conclusion,
although
the
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apply
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money
 can solve some problems,
it
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apply
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other
types
 had boons for poor
people
 they can
used
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use
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 directly and save many families.
Therefore
, l believe that
give
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giving
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 the poor counties other
types
will
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of will
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 solve the
poverty
 short term, but financial aid will solve the
poverty
for
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in
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long
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the long
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 term.
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