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In some countries, young people are not only richer but also safer and healthier than ever before. However, they are less happy. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is difficult not to witness a number of wealthy teenagers in some countries. While the evolution of the
world
 made young individuals live in a better
world
 allowing them to be more secure and healthier,
however
, their satisfaction
of
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life
 has decreased compared to the past.
This
 essay will prevent the culprits of
this
 phenomenon and suggest measures to mitigate the problems. In
modern
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world
, teenagers are forced to learn and be loaded with numerous skills and knowledge to land a
good
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 paid job. Given that the
world
 is getting more competitive among people, young generations are going through hectic
life
 even before becoming an adult to get a
lucrutive
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lucrative
 job which eventually
lead
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 them to burnt out
quickely
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quickly
. To tackle
this
 issue, taking a gap year for young individuals should become compulsory for them to get some time to ease their stresses.
Thus
 all of them will equally have the same amount of time to get a break to think about their future as well as a good chance to balance their
life
.
In addition
 to the
irrevitable
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irresistible
irritable
inevitable
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contemporary
contemeporary
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contemporary
life
 trend,
increasing
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 number of young people are becoming dependent. Young individuals who live
under
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 a rich family tend to have no concerns either about money or their upcoming future since they will be
heritaged
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heritage
 from their parents.
However
, they cannot live
in
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a happy
life
 since they have no ability and knowledge
how
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 to live against the
world
.To solve
this
 matter, the government has to ban the inheritance of
the
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property which goes to their children among the
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wealthy
weathly
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wealthy
 public
,
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 and to be utilized
for
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the
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society. When
this
 scheme is successfully implemented, the government can not only
can
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bridge the
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gap
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gab
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gap
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 between poverty and
rich
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the rich
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 as well as witness the
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 trend of the average
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happiness
happyness
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happiness
 among the youth. In conclusion, some countries are packed full of
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wealthy
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weathly
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wealthy
 young generation and they seem to live an unhappy
life
 compared to others.
This
 is analysed that it is because of the tough educational level and the significant
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gap
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gab
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gap
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 between rich and poor,
however
, it is unsurmountable to deal with the problem if the government take immediate action.
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