the topic: Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
claim that everyone should have an opportunity to schooling but for many
people
in the world it is still
unavaliable
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unavailable
available
and they have to invest huge money in
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knowledge. I truly believe that all humans should have access to free
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teaching
.
Firstly
, at
this
time it is necessary to have many skills like reading, writing or counting.
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if someone will not be able to get obligatory abilities that person will struggle to get any job.
Moreover
, an employer for sure will not pay a person who will not manage to do primary duties.
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argument is that
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a
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schooling has
an
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positive impact on our behaviour. For the sake of
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homework or
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we are learning how
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more resourceful,
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well-balanced
even open-minded,
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it is
shapeing
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shaping
our character and personality.
Although
, a possibility to learning should be for everyone,
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because
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influence on leaving in community.
On the other hand
, many times
people
don't want to use a chance for free learning. Nowadays, when we have access to social media, especially young
people
have a problem motivating themselves to discover knowledge. It may turn out it
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a waste of time for teachers as well
students
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.
However
, there is not many
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of that
occurence
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occurrence
. In conclusion, every person should get a chance to
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, as a
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get a profitable job. In my opinion, an education affects
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our future life and occupation to
such
an extent that without many primary
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we may have a problem
to
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earning money.
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