the topic: Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

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people

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claim that everyone should have an opportunity to schooling but for many

people

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in the world it is still

unavaliable

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and they have to invest huge money in

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knowledge. I truly believe that all humans should have access to free

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teaching

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time it is necessary to have many skills like reading, writing or counting.

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if someone will not be able to get obligatory abilities that person will struggle to get any job.

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schooling has

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positive impact on our behaviour. For the sake of

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homework or

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we are learning how

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more resourceful,

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it is

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our character and personality.

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, a possibility to learning should be for everyone,

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influence on leaving in community.

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don't want to use a chance for free learning. Nowadays, when we have access to social media, especially young

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have a problem motivating themselves to discover knowledge. It may turn out it

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a waste of time for teachers as well

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. In conclusion, every person should get a chance to

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get a profitable job. In my opinion, an education affects

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our future life and occupation to

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we may have a problem

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earning money.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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260 words

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the topic: Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Some people think the government should support artists like painters, musicians, and poets, while others believe this wastes money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is positive or negative development?

Climate change is a significant issue that requires urgent attention. What are the primary causes of climate change? How can individuals and governments work together to address this issue?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school Program (for example working for a charity, Improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Government spend a lot of money on education. More money should be spent on free time activities. To what extent do agree or disagree?