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Nowadays, there is no need for museums and art galleries anymore. Since everything is accessible through internet. People can find any historic fact there. Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons and examples of yours personal knowledge.

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Introduction
Many people claim, that, at
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internet is full of information about
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the history
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, in a consequence many
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institutions
instytutions
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institutions
 whiches exist to show famous and ancient
exhybitions
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exhibitions
 are not really needed.
Body paragraph 1
I truly believe that many facilities linked with wonderful art or ancient time are necessary to
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 open for viewers. In
this
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 essay I am going to shed light on it is advantages.
Body paragraph 2
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,
in
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 the
internet
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 we can discover
many
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 fake information. For
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instant, the most popular source of
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knowledge
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"Wikipedia" provide
informations
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information
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 about many aspects,
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nevertheless
, everyone can add their own facts.
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Although
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, places like
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a museum
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museum
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museums
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 or art
galeries
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galleries
 "can tell" the
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.
Body paragraph 4
Secondly
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,
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aforementioned
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aformentioned
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aforementioned
 places give
an
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us an
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 opportunity to see as closest as we can an
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exhibition
exhibitions
,
in
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 opposed to
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 internet where we
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 able to see details
on
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 the pictures or videos.
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Thirdly
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,
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an area
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area
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 with historical character always will have
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 place in a tourist's heart.
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As a
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, plenty of cities earn money
on
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 the tourism sector.
Body paragraph 7
On the other hand
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, sometimes people can not afford to go
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 a journey
on
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 the other end of
world
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the world
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,
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so they have a chance for
virtual
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a virtual
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 tour on
muesum's
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museum's
 website.
Conclusion
In my opinion;
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bases on my experience,
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historicial
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historical
 places bring many treasured aspects into our life. As for me see visiting "The National Gallery" and
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 by my own eyes Van Gogh's
masterpiece
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masterpieces
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 was like a dream come true.

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