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International travelling is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages?

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many public nowadays prefer to travel abroad as countries have reduced prices and they are welcoming more tourists.I believe
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 is a great step and it has a lot of merits in terms of personal relations, and opening up opportunities like import-export and establishment of the business.,
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, demerits like the chances of spreading infectious diseases cannot be ignored. On the one hand, travelling internationally brings a plethora of procs to the respective country,
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,folk can build good personal relationships among themselves through,learning about their culture and traditions which can
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 introduce people to try some new fashions and things..,
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,many businessmen can avail of
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 opportunity to flourish their business across the world ,
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, many big brands have opened up franchises all over the world and they visit them from time to time
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 earning a handsome amount of money.
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,it has definitely some drawbacks ,like giving rise to many infectious diseases,
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 as the recent COVID-19 pandemic that started in one country and embedded its roots in all parts of the world.,
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,it was indeed a worse situation to deal with,
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, specific measures should be taken by the local government to tackle with
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 kind of issue. To conclude,I would agree with the fact that
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,tourism can create a big health risk to the local community, building up good economical and personal relationships are some of the important attributes no one can deny.,
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 we should encourage people to travel often with precautionary measures to ensure the safety of other people.
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