IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #strength #success #sport
Some majority of people think that physical clout is more important whereas others think that intellectual fortitude plays an important role in the victory of sports. While there are many benefits to considering physical clout there are
also
 some drawbacks to consider in
this
 essay I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the latter view.
Firstly
, bolstering intellectual firmness is crucial to hold the
game
 consistently.
For example
, I will take my friend who is a tennis player, she works hard and practices day and night to achieve her goals. But when her grandfather passed away she couldn’t concentrate on the
game
 and due to
this
 , the reason she lost
one
 of her tournaments.By
this
 illustration it is clear cerebral power is
one
 of the keys to winning a
game
.
On the other hand
, another reason according to me is even
one
's physical stability. To illustrate, a person though physically inactive can win a
game
 through his wisdom and experiences in life.
For instance
, I will take an example of a player who was much elder than the opponent who won the match not because of his physical strength but because of his wisdom and experiences.
Consequently
, it can be said that psychology is the key factor for victory over the
game
. To conclude, it is not to say that other points of view are total without merits. The reasons I have mentioned could support the scenario that if
one
 wants to win a
game
, mental power is more important than physical toughness. Some people think that physical courage is important for success in sports, while other people think that mental fortitude is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Submitted by venkaterp99 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
What to do next:
Look at other essays: