Children should always follow their parents’ advice. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Children
are
depended
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on their
parents
and unable to figure
things
out by themselves in most cases.
Although
some people agree that
children
should not ask for
parents
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advice, in my opinion,
children
should always take advice from their
parents
to ensure the best for themselves. Experience in
decision making
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is a thing which is irreplaceable.
Children
apparently might find something correct,
however
, deeper consequences can only be understood by the
parents
with their years of
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experience
experiences
experinces
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experience
.
On the other hand
,
children
are sometimes not aware of the harmful aspects of many
things
. They decide to go for the
things
that seem fun to them while
parents
can actually enlighten them about both the positive and negative perspectives of something. People might argue that letting
children
decide
things
by
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their own will make them independent and
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confident
conifident
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confident
. While
this
is partially true, we must keep in mind
about
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the limitations of a child's
decision making
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capability
capabilty
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capability
. At the same time,
parents
should give liberty to their
children
to decide on
things
like picking a hobby, choosing
the
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favourie
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favourite
genres of books, playing
favourite
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sports and other personal choices. While
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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from
parents
help
children
to understand their own good,
parents
should
also
let the
children
to
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decide for themselves regarding personal choices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
  • deviating
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