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Children should always follow their parents’ advice. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#children #parents’ #advice
Children
 are
depended
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 on their
parents
 and unable to figure
things
 out by themselves in most cases.
Although
 some people agree that
children
 should not ask for
parents
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parents'
parent's
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 advice, in my opinion,
children
 should always take advice from their
parents
 to ensure the best for themselves. Experience in
decision making
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 is a thing which is irreplaceable.
Children
 apparently might find something correct,
however
, deeper consequences can only be understood by the
parents
 with their years of
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experience
experiences
experinces
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experience
.
On the other hand
,
children
 are sometimes not aware of the harmful aspects of many
things
. They decide to go for the
things
 that seem fun to them while
parents
 can actually enlighten them about both the positive and negative perspectives of something. People might argue that letting
children
 decide
things
by
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 their own will make them independent and
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confident
conifident
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confident
. While
this
 is partially true, we must keep in mind
about
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the limitations of a child's
decision making
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capability
capabilty
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capability
. At the same time,
parents
 should give liberty to their
children
 to decide on
things
 like picking a hobby, choosing
the
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their
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favourie
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favourite
 genres of books, playing
favourite
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their favourite
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 sports and other personal choices. While
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
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 from
parents
 help
children
 to understand their own good,
parents
 should
also
 let the
children
to
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decide for themselves regarding personal choices.
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  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
  • deviating
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