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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few individuals are of the opinion that the best way to be successful in one's field of
work
 is by attending a high
school
 or a higher institution, while the rest are of the idea that getting a
job
 immediately after
school
 is preferable. I believe that it is necessary to go through college as well as obtain a
university
 education for the purpose of acquiring
work
 in a certain field, while primary education can be enough to kick-start one's career where little or no educational background is required.
Firstly
, in occupations and
job
 positions where high academic skills and
knowledge
 are a requirement, attending a college or
university
 is a necessity.
For example
 in a construction company like Civmec in Western Australia, where the position of a civil engineer is advertised, preference will be given to candidates with Civil engineering
university
 certificates, skills and
knowledge
 rather than someone who has no training in that field.
This
 is because it is believed that the preferred person would have undergone several practicals and tutoring pertaining to the
work
 he or she is applying for. Whereas, someone who has a prospect of seeking a
job
 as an attendant in a grocery store or restaurant, will only need little or no academic
knowledge
.
Therefore
 a person who has only attended a primary
school
 has a great opportunity in
this
 instance and may as well flourish in
this
 career of choice, which will only require experience on the actual
job
. Most of
this
 kind of
work
 put workers through training and orientation regardless of their prior skills and
knowledge
. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people can be successful in their careers whether they study at
university
, college or just elementary
school
. It will only depend on the type of occupation or
job
 the person is taking up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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