Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to young people . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

indeed, individuals are attracted towards celebs' lifestyle and outlook rather than their success
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impact on younglings. I solely agree
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statement which I have depicted in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, celebrities are keen
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making money
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they try to indulge in as many advertisements as possible. Because they might
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loose
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their stardom after a certain age
hence
those people even do promotions related to pan masalas and tobacco.
However
,
this
is adversely affecting the youth who is closely watching the star.
For example
, Sharukh Khan is obsessed with smoking so he
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it regularly in his movies on the behalf of
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lot of young stars who are following him started using
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their life. Following celebrities can pave
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towards bad habits in
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youngsters during their early teenage
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teenagers take celebrities as role models, which affects their
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.
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way they dress and how they look makes them insecure
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in front
of others,
as a result
of
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even though they have a great smile they tend to not show
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the public. For an instance, a lady in New York
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appeared
appered
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appeared
in front of plastic surgery to become like Jenifer Lopez, she went through 36
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surgeries which resulted in her death. Stars can cause
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inferiority complex
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among
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children
childrens
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children
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. To conclude,
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the life
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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or the personalities of stars may disturb or affect the younglings when in their youth I
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believe
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belive
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this
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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