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Some people think that to be successful, you need to get a university education, whereas others say it is not true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #education
A set of citizens opine that to reach the apex level one should have tertiary education,
On the other hand
, others believe that it is not appropriate.
However
, I assume that both are important when it comes to certain jobs. I have depicted
this
 in the following paragraphs. At the onset, major jobs which are skill-based need a University education and it is mandatory. Because certain jobs need to showcase the
qualification
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qualifications
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 to get it.
For example
, an individual who completed
plumbing
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a plumbing
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 course cannot work as a software engineer it
required
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requires
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 a specific college degree in order to get the job.
Hence
 it
clear
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 that on who are looking for white
collor
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college
job
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jobs
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 should carry a college degree.
On the other hand
, folks who are interested in making money before even getting into graduation can opt
physical
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 labour.
This
 will help the individual
for helping
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 his family at
the
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a
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 young age
itself
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apply
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. With
the
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experience and
time
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time,
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 he can become better and wealthy. For
an
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apply
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instance, a carpenter needs experience rather than holding a degree. There are certain people who
could not
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 afford
tution
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tuition
 fees and
in
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are in
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debts
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 these individuals can
also
 become financially independent but have to work hard with
the
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apply
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time. From my point of view, both the community can become successful in their own way with
the
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apply
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time.
To conclude
, people have different
choice
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choices
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 certain ones who
are
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do
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 not
having
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have
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 money for
studies
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their studies
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 can continue to work at
the
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a
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 young age.
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task response
Ensure that you fully address the task prompt. Provide a balanced discussion of both views and clearly express your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your ideas logically. Use appropriate transitions to connect your ideas and ensure that your introduction and conclusion are comprehensive.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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