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Many people believe there should be a curfew law so that people under the age of 18 are not out past midnight. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
Many
people
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 claim that rules should be more severe towards
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young
people
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, as a results teenager under 18
should't
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shouldn't
should
 spend their free time
Body paragraph 1
away from the home.
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I truly
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believe
bieleve
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believe
 that younger
people
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 should have an access to coming back even after midnight.
Body paragraph 3
For
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the
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first
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,
adolescenthood
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adolescent hood
 is linked with many duties and passions. During that time young
people
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 discover their
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strengths
strenghts
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strengths
,
furthermore
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 can become job-seekers.
Body paragraph 4
For example
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, many
employee
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employees
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 offer a job as a
weiter
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writer
waiter
 under 18, as far we know plenty of
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restaurants
restaurant
restaurast
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restaurants
close
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 their door after midnight, so sometimes it is necessary for them to come back late at home.
Body paragraph 5
Subsequent
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The subsequent
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 argument is that
,
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the
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scientist
confirm
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 that puberty may be very tough
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course
couse
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because
people
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 are more
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sensitive
sensitve
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sensitive
 and stressed in that case
relax
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 is very relevant.
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For an instance, in many
countries
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 we can find
an events
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an event
events
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 which are organised by cinemas, a well
night clubs
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nightclubs
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 directly
to
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for
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the
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people
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 from 16 years old.
Body paragraph 7
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Aforementioned
Aformentioned
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The aformentioned
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 events usually finish late
give
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giving
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 an opportunity to hang out with friends.
Body paragraph 8
On the other hand
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, too much free time
under
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at
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 midnight may have
bad
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a bad
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 influence on young society, because some of them may
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have
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tohave
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 get involved in
some
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apply
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illegal
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organisations
organistations
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organisations
,
as
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and as
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an
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a
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 consequence be expelled from school.
Neverthelles
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Nevertheless
, If
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parents
parent
parental
parenta
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parents
 underline the
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boundaries
boundries
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boundaries
 they will know what they can afford.
Conclusion
To sum up, for the sake

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