It is cruel to keep animals in zoos. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For many years in the past,

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creating

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by the

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to show exotic

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the

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people. It was considered a form of animal abuse today, but nowadays,

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have a different

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purpose

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than many people think. To start, in the

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, many species of animal are in danger of

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extinction

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extinction

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illegal hunting and the pollution of their

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natural

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environment, everything

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of people and for

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, many

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are disappearing and

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has other consequences,

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as forced migration or alterations in the ecosystem.

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reasons that

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went from being entertainment centres to protection and

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research

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areas to preserve endangered species. The

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have specialists to make the

animals

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feel safe in these places, adapting their spaces so that they are similar to their natural environment.

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, many governments do not financially support these animal protection centres, so these places are open to the public so that they can visit the

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the zookeepers obtain resources to be able to care for and study the

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not all

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purpose, the concept of

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has improved over time and I think that

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should be given more consideration because they are doing good for the world.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

214 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Conservation efforts
Endangered species
Breeding programs
Biodiversity
Captivity
Stress or discomfort
Unnatural environments
Educational purpose
Scientific research
Ethical concerns
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Economic terms
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It is cruel to keep animals in zoos. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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