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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in the number of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

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In today’s world, with the growing
population
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, the number of old
people
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 will increase and communities around the world have to take
care
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 of them. I believe,
people
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 can deal with
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 action and be able to find an efficient plan which has benefits for everyone and
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 essay will discuss two ways of that.
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 with, there is no doubt that by increasing the
population
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 of elderly
people
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 the
government
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 should build more healthcare places for them.
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, those
people
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 should not have any concerns about their living
place
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 when they are old.
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, one of my friends before his immigration was looking for a
place
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 to move his grandma, and they found a nice
place
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 which was free because it was for the
government
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 to take
care
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 of his grandma.
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, having a home for aged
people
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 in each neighbourhood can guarantee an acceptable
place
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 for you to live when you get old.
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, politicians and the
government
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 of each country can use their elderly
population
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 in some useful ways, because, one-by-one of those
people
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 had work and profession before which will make them a teacher with high experience.
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, when I was in grade one our teacher was older than the normal teachers in that school but she taught us every lesson better than any employees on that education board, because of her experience.
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, every company or the
government
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 should look to those
people
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 as a priceless source of knowledge. To conclude, with increasing the
population
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 the rate of old
people
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 will grow too. In my opinion, each society should take
care
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 of them with detailed planning
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 as building more places to take
care
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 of them and using their experience in a good way.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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